February 24, 2024
Chicago 12, Melborne City, USA

IELTS Cambridge 17 Essay: Health Problems

Nowadays, an increasing number of people with health problems are using alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their normal doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Analysis

1. In recent years, a growing number of unwell individuals have begun to adopt the use of alternative medicines and treatments. 2. In my opinion, though these can sometimes be effective, this trend is negative overall due to the superiority of modern medicine.

  1. Paraphrase the overall essay topic.
  2. Write a clear opinion.

1. Those who support alternative remedies argue there is historical evidence in favor of their effectiveness. 2. A pertinent example of this would be the popularity of traditional Chinese medicine in Asia. 3. Many of their medicines and treatments date back hundreds or even thousands of years. 4. Over that time, they have been tested and their effect verified in some cases. 5. Contemporary health researchers are often able to later identify the scientific rationale but it is possible there are remedies in use today that we still do not understand. 6. This ignorance should not serve as a justification to question their overall importance.

  1. Write a topic sentence with a clear main idea at the end.
  2. Explain your main idea.
  3. Develop it with specific or hypothetical examples.
  4. Keep developing it fully.
  5. Short sentences can make your writing clearer.
  6. Use complex and simple sentences.

1. However, the vast majority of viable medical treatment is modern. 2. Scientists now understand more rigorously the underlying structures of cells, viruses, bacteria, cancers, and various other maladies. 3. This has allowed for the creation of undeniably effective procedures such as surgery and the discovery of crucial medicines like penicillin. 4. There is no doubt as to why these medicines work and therefore in the future they will only become more refined and safe. 5. In contrast, traditional medicine may be effective for unknown reasons but its applicability is limited and it will not advance overtime.

  1. Write a new topic sentence with a new main idea at the end.
  2. Explain your new main idea.
  3. Include specific details and examples.
  4. Add as much information as you can and make sure it links logically.
  5. Finish the paragraph strong.

1. In conclusion, with few exceptions, traditional medicine is a better alternative to less verifiable treatments and pharmaceuticals. 2. Individuals can attempt to use them but should rely on their usual doctors.

  1. Summarise your main ideas.
  2. Include a final thought.
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